Pivot Stick Animation

Crabwarrior · 10-28-2007, 02:47 PM

I just finished an animation and want some constructive criticism. Please be picky! Please give me some feedback. Below is the animation. Ctrl+Shift+R refreshes the page.
Below the animation is the explanation of what is happening in the animation.
It helps you see what's happening better if you watch a different stick each time.

Animation

One of the sticks (Stick B) pulls back his fist as he advances to punch, but the stick on the right (Stick A) punches 'Stick B' in the stomach (ow). The next stick, (Stick C) steps forward to grab 'stick A', but he gets kneed in the chin (ow again). 'Stick D' pulls out a sword, but 'stick A' breaks his arm, (ow!!!) and throws 'D' to the floor. 'Stick E' runs away, and 'Stick F' pulls out a gun. 'A' tackles 'F' and knocks him to the floor as he gets shot in the shoulder (ow!). 'A' then walks out of the animation.
Edit: at the beginning, 'A' doesn't knee 'B', he punches him.
Inviso-text!
Note: In the Pivot file, the colors are more pronounced. Yes, they all have different colors.

~~Ryuinfinity~~ · 10-28-2007, 03:05 PM

Wow.
*Padding*

ElMikkino · 10-28-2007, 04:10 PM

Woah! Nice explosion-thingamajiggies!

Crabwarrior · 10-28-2007, 05:35 PM

I think 'D', the one with the sword, the one that is supposed to be kind of blue-green, had it the hardest.

Oh! and notice that when 'D' gets his arm broken

both 'F' and 'G' tense up.

Edit: I will try to update the image so it has stronger colors, but it might not work.

Roland · 10-28-2007, 11:09 PM

Woah! That's good! Some movements were really good and I liked the explosions, especially the bit at the end - That was awesome!

.Blue Dwarf. · 10-29-2007, 08:41 AM

^I had one here the guy jumped over a monster and kicked it in the eye then climbed up a cliff, but then all ^of the sudden all my circles turned into lines and everything got messed up

^
^Anyway that is a pretty awesome thing up there

souperzombie · 10-29-2007, 12:46 PM

you are MUCH better then me.

Mr.Onion · 10-29-2007, 12:51 PM

I think, next time you give an animation, make a link to it, rather than embed it.

Crabwarrior · 10-29-2007, 06:40 PM

Thanks, Onion, I will try to keep that in mind.

Licking Post · 10-29-2007, 08:13 PM

Constructive criticism, you say? You sure I can't give destructive criticism, like how much I think your animation stinks? Conveniently, I don't really want to give any destructive criticism. I actually think it was quite good! But your protagonist seems to be hunched over a bit. Do you think you could straighten his back up a bit? I like the idea of making flexible backbones, but I think you went a little overboard. Just a little. Unfortunately, I realize it's quite a pain to go back and edit each individual frame so his back is straighter. I wouldn't worry too much about it.

Roland · 10-30-2007, 01:01 AM

Hey, I just noticed the 3D on the falling sword! Nice work!

Crabwarrior · 10-30-2007, 06:20 AM

Thanks! I didn't think anyone would notice the "3D"!

Crabwarrior · 10-30-2007, 06:22 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Licking Post

[...I actually think it was quite good! But your protagonist seems to be hunched over a bit. Do you think you could straighten his back up a bit? I like the idea of making flexible backbones, but I think you went a little overboard. Just a little. Unfortunately, I realize it's quite a pain to go back and edit each individual frame so his back is straighter...]

I will keep that in mind. Thanks!

~~varkarrus~~ · 10-30-2007, 05:32 PM

While your at it, add motion blurs and more scenes

Crabwarrior · 10-30-2007, 07:34 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by varkarrus

While your at it, add motion blurs and more scenes

Motion blur would be murder, and I think it would be pointless. As for more scenes, this wasn't supposed to be long, this was to get an idea what to improve. Thanks for the suggestions, though.
About the motion blurs, I think they only fit in slow-motion or when something is moving really fast.

Ufo-Man · 11-20-2007, 11:02 AM

I like it. I made some of my own, but It is on youtube.

10-28-2007, 02:47 PM	#1
Crabwarrior Hamumuian Join Date: May 2007 Location: In ur house, freeing ur goldfish. Posts: 375	Pivot Stick Animation I just finished an animation and want some constructive criticism. Please be picky! Please give me some feedback. Below is the animation. Ctrl+Shift+R refreshes the page. Below the animation is the explanation of what is happening in the animation. It helps you see what's happening better if you watch a different stick each time. Animation One of the sticks (Stick B) pulls back his fist as he advances to punch, but the stick on the right (Stick A) punches 'Stick B' in the stomach (ow). The next stick, (Stick C) steps forward to grab 'stick A', but he gets kneed in the chin (ow again). 'Stick D' pulls out a sword, but 'stick A' breaks his arm, (ow!!!) and throws 'D' to the floor. 'Stick E' runs away, and 'Stick F' pulls out a gun. 'A' tackles 'F' and knocks him to the floor as he gets shot in the shoulder (ow!). 'A' then walks out of the animation. Edit: at the beginning, 'A' doesn't knee 'B', he punches him. Inviso-text! Note: In the Pivot file, the colors are more pronounced. Yes, they all have different colors. __________________ Beware of quantum ducks: Quark! Quark! Last edited by Crabwarrior; 10-29-2007 at 04:51 PM. Reason: Mr. Onion requested it

10-28-2007, 03:05 PM	#2
~~Ryuinfinity~~ Banned Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: Domefield Centre Mission: Defeat the Zirrons in Chyare Strait. Posts: 1,045	Re: Pivot Stick Animation Wow. Padding

10-28-2007, 04:10 PM	#3
ElMikkino Certified Bunnay Agent Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: Not Kansas Posts: 1,652	Re: Pivot Stick Animation Woah! Nice explosion-thingamajiggies! __________________ When in Rome, drink Romenade. Toronto Island is the entertainment.- Translation Party This won’t appear 3D to you unless you cut very precise grooves in your computer monitor. We don’t recommend doing that. - GamesRadar Humility is the mark of a true warrior/cool person.

10-28-2007, 05:35 PM	#4
Crabwarrior Hamumuian Join Date: May 2007 Location: In ur house, freeing ur goldfish. Posts: 375	Re: Pivot Stick Animation I think 'D', the one with the sword, the one that is supposed to be kind of blue-green, had it the hardest. Oh! and notice that when 'D' gets his arm broken both 'F' and 'G' tense up. Edit: I will try to update the image so it has stronger colors, but it might not work. __________________ Beware of quantum ducks: Quark! Quark! Last edited by Crabwarrior; 10-28-2007 at 05:36 PM.

10-28-2007, 11:09 PM	#5
Roland Lynched Day 3 Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: Innocence Posts: 2,113	Re: Pivot Stick Animation Woah! That's good! Some movements were really good and I liked the explosions, especially the bit at the end - That was awesome! __________________ moo

10-29-2007, 08:41 AM	#6
.Blue Dwarf. King of the Shrooms Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: Saving the World, one pond at a time. Posts: 1,209	Re: Pivot Stick Animation ^I had one here the guy jumped over a monster and kicked it in the eye then climbed up a cliff, but then all ^of the sudden all my circles turned into lines and everything got messed up ^ ^Anyway that is a pretty awesome thing up there __________________ Happy New Year! 2013! Also, show some support for Hamumu and get your world-smithing on and help make the first new Monthly Merge a frightening success! (The arrow! It's a link! CLICK IT NOW!) Last edited by .Blue Dwarf.; 10-29-2007 at 08:42 AM.

10-29-2007, 12:46 PM	#7
souperzombie All your brains belong to me! Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: I am the terror that lurks in your soup bowl! Posts: 618	Re: Pivot Stick Animation you are MUCH better then me. __________________ Become one of us. Join the revolution.

10-29-2007, 12:51 PM	#8
Mr.Onion Evil, random-voting vegetable Join Date: Mar 2005 Location: Down at the shore where there's no-one vacationing. Posts: 4,860	Re: Pivot Stick Animation I think, next time you give an animation, make a link to it, rather than embed it. __________________

10-29-2007, 06:40 PM	#9
Crabwarrior Hamumuian Join Date: May 2007 Location: In ur house, freeing ur goldfish. Posts: 375	Re: Pivot Stick Animation Thanks, Onion, I will try to keep that in mind. __________________ Beware of quantum ducks: Quark! Quark!

10-29-2007, 08:13 PM	#10
Licking Post Tongue of the Forum Join Date: May 2007 Location: Iowa Posts: 333	Re: Pivot Stick Animation Constructive criticism, you say? You sure I can't give destructive criticism, like how much I think your animation stinks? Conveniently, I don't really want to give any destructive criticism. I actually think it was quite good! But your protagonist seems to be hunched over a bit. Do you think you could straighten his back up a bit? I like the idea of making flexible backbones, but I think you went a little overboard. Just a little. Unfortunately, I realize it's quite a pain to go back and edit each individual frame so his back is straighter. I wouldn't worry too much about it. __________________ Rainbows FTW!

10-30-2007, 01:01 AM	#11
Roland Lynched Day 3 Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: Innocence Posts: 2,113	Re: Pivot Stick Animation Hey, I just noticed the 3D on the falling sword! Nice work! __________________ moo Last edited by Roland; 10-30-2007 at 01:01 AM.

10-30-2007, 06:20 AM	#12
Crabwarrior Hamumuian Join Date: May 2007 Location: In ur house, freeing ur goldfish. Posts: 375	Re: Pivot Stick Animation Thanks! I didn't think anyone would notice the "3D"! __________________ Beware of quantum ducks: Quark! Quark!

10-30-2007, 05:32 PM	#14
~~varkarrus~~ Banned Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Fending Off Boredom Posts: 1,940	Re: Pivot Stick Animation While your at it, add motion blurs and more scenes

11-20-2007, 11:02 AM	#16
Ufo-Man Red is MAH color! Join Date: Oct 2007 Posts: 1,336	Re: Pivot Stick Animation I like it. I made some of my own, but It is on youtube. __________________ Good Memories. Steam:

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